Seduction
Posted on 01. Mar, 2010 by Mani Padma in 55 Fiction, Creative Writing, Issue 5, Issues, Sections, Vol. I
Her dark dancing eyes followed him.
Then he noticed her.
Something about her drew him towards her.
Hi… He smiled expectantly.
She slapped him hard … and left.
He rushed after her.
Pinning her against the wall, he growled, why?
Why so long to introduce? She countered mockingly.
He froze…
Then started kissing her hungrily.
Gyanban
Mar 1st, 2010
Good but not great.
I think if you have seen Basic instinct part 1, where michael douglas pins sharon stone to the wall…that was intense stuff. I visualized that while reading your post – but like I said need a better dialog exchange to heighten the passion.